Saturday Centus: Windfall

It’s Celebration time at Jenny Matlock’s place! Why, Because today is the 100th Saturday Centus, a Saturday Centennial!!

 To celebrate, Jenny is going back to where it started, the very first ever Saturday Centus, and we are to use that very first ever Prompt for our 100 word Centus. The funniest part is that Jenny, who has taught us to write tight, started out with a very, very, very wordy prompt – 53 words, to be exact! So instead of repeating the prompt twice, I will start with it, and then add a short —- line between the prompt and my continuance. Also, in celebration, I made very very sure that my continuation was exactly 100 words, in honor of this great day.

So, without further ado…

Windfall   (153 words)

My untied shoelace changed my life. As I leaned down to re-tie it, I kicked away a few leaves. When I turned my head slightly to look where the leaves had been, I was astonished to see a rubber-banded wad of hundred dollar bills nestled in a little indention in the muddy ground.

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Windfall! my heart sang.

Trouble…” whispered a voice.

I picked up the bills. Maybe I should check it out.

I stopped by the bank. “Someone paid me with this,” I handed the teller a bill, “Can you tell me if it’s counterfeit?”

She took the bill to a man in the back. He examined it, then entered the serial number in a database.

The teller brought it back. “It’s real.”

I left the bank, my heart hammering.  Windfall!

“Trouble…”  the voice insisted.

“Shut up.” I said.

A van pulled up. Three men jumped out.

“Oh, crap.”

“I told you so…”

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24 responses to this post.

  1. I used to dream about finding a pile of money.

    And my dream would always include this second part, too. Where some scary came to get their money back.

    This made my heart pound.

    Run! Run! And leave the money!

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  2. A definite argument against the notion of finders keepers!

    😉

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  3. LOL, I loved this. Very creative. I really liked the use of the “trouble voice”.

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  4. Hah! I knew it!! Drug money!! Great take on the prompt!!

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    • Thanks Judie, Actually, this ending was out of the blue, not what I had in mind, but I guess I just couldn’t let him get away with it. I’m sometimes cruel with my characters. 😉

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  5. I enjoyed this very much. Thanks for sharing. Bing. Bang. Boom.

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  6. Well paced and captivating! 🙂

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  7. […] write tuit  (writing challenges) My post Writing Challenge: Plots is for Chris Donner’s new challenge. It’s very different from the usual fare, so check it out if you’re looking for inspiration.  At Julia’s Place, Julia gave us an interesting twist to this weeks 100 word challenge, my entry is  100WCGU: Rabbit.  My second try at Quill Shiv’s Flash Fiction Faction gave me quite a creepy idea in Fiction Faction: Cheating Death. And guess what? Jenny Matlock’s Saturday Centus is celebrating the 100th week! Her unusually long prompt was a tough act to follow, but I tried it with Saturday Centus: Windfall. […]

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  8. Haha. Perfect! That little voice is our best friend… we just need to learn listen.

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  9. Oh what a shame and so soon after finding it. I’m sure it would have been trouble though!

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  10. Posted by Karen S. on March 31, 2012 at 19:06

    So cool! Quick hop in the van let’s go they’ll never catch the Zoom-Zoom Van! We’re history !

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  11. Nice job! Yes, those little voices are always there!

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  12. The voice here was so completely natural, and the timing exquisite. Great one Judee!

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