For this week’s 100 Word Challenge for Grownups, Julia has offered up a challenge with a twist. We’ve been given an 8 word prompt, nothing unusual so far, and so we have 100 words, plus the 8 from the prompt, to create our entry. What is different this time is that Julia has decreed, “You have 100 words making a total of 108. However, the last 10 words are going to be used to start a piece by someone else next week!!” Go check it out for yourself, just click the link or the logo.
This week’s prompt:
‘What was the rabbit late for?’ wondered Alice.
Rabbit Hunt (107 words)
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‘What was the rabbit late for?’ wondered Alice, peering around the park.
Static in her ear, then, ” Fox-two to Foxy-Lady, do you copy?”
“Copy, Fox-two,”
“The rabbit has run.”
“What?”
“The rabbit–”
“I heard the first time! Where?”
“Out the south gate, must have sensed the trap.”
Weariness washed through Alice as she slumped onto the park bench. It had been a good plan. Her plan. It should have worked, dammit! What had gone wrong?
Now they had to go to plan-B, a much more dangerous option. Alice hated to take the risk, but she had no choice. The little girl’s life was in her hands.
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Posted by Ian on April 9, 2012 at 15:35
I love the take on the prompt, Judee. A really suspenseful piece!
Posted by Judee on April 10, 2012 at 08:28
Thank you so much Ian. I wish I could have participated this week, but it wasn’t to be. Off to see if you participated.
Posted by jfb57 on April 1, 2012 at 19:13
Oooo! This has spy thriller all over it. I love it & you have really taken the prompt in a different direction. Great writing and use of the imagination. Thanks for joining in!
Posted by Judee on April 2, 2012 at 08:45
Thank you Julia, it’s always nice to see you.
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Posted by Ronnie@Hurtledto60 on March 31, 2012 at 17:29
Don’t think I like the sound of Plan B, Alice obviously doesn’t either. Interesting final 10 words for next week.
Posted by Judee on April 1, 2012 at 09:11
Nope, Plan B is not pleasant. At all. 😉 Thanks for the visit, Ronnie.
Posted by SarahC (@madyline) on March 31, 2012 at 08:19
Loved this. The idea of taking the story away from the traditional is a delightful concept.
Posted by Judee on March 31, 2012 at 09:42
Thank you so much Sarah – did you participate too? I may have read it, but don’t have a link back to a blog for you, just twitter.
Posted by SarahC (@madyline) on March 31, 2012 at 10:19
Hmmm. I shall have to start leaving my blog in my comments I think. I’ve got around the blogger/wordpress commenting difficulty by using twitter to comment from.
(But you found it anyway, because you are a detective! Thankyou for your comment, glad I made you laugh!)
Posted by Let's CUT the Crap! on March 31, 2012 at 01:08
I like the sense of mystery at the end.
Posted by Judee on March 31, 2012 at 09:41
Thank you – and I just read yours, and loved it – such fun!
Posted by Gilly Gee on March 30, 2012 at 12:41
Oh scarey Judee, will you continue it? Is there a rabbit hole involved? You have left it very well for whatever Julia has planned for next week :-)and you have well and truly ran with it. Fabby!
Posted by Judee on March 30, 2012 at 15:25
Thank you so much GG, and I can’t wait to see how Julia is going to figure out who works with what prompt! Lovely to see you here.
Posted by Mayumi on March 30, 2012 at 11:35
Nice take on the running rabbit! 😀 I never would have thought of that, myself, but it does make perfect sense. The tension with that one line – “I heard the first time! Where?” – gives me chills. 🙂 Great closing line, too: I’ll look forward to whomever gets to pick it up!
Posted by Judee on March 30, 2012 at 11:53
Thank you Mayumi, I’m glad that tension came through. Nice of you to stop by. 🙂
Posted by Andrea on March 30, 2012 at 11:22
Thrillers are my favourite genre of book .. and this got me hooked from the outset.
You’re very talented, I just wish there was more to read hehehe
Andrea
Posted by Judee on March 30, 2012 at 11:25
I’m glad you liked it. Thanks so much for dropping by. 🙂
Posted by judithatwood on March 29, 2012 at 17:23
Judee, this is terrific. When you are done with the novel, I want to read it! 😎
Posted by Judee on March 30, 2012 at 10:52
Ha, now that’s funny! Thank you judith, glad you dropped by.
Posted by judithatwood on March 30, 2012 at 11:56
.,. 😎
Posted by annahalford (@anhalf) on March 28, 2012 at 21:11
Great piece- reminded me of the Jackal or Bourne. Well written.
Posted by Judee on March 29, 2012 at 09:24
Thank you so much, anna. 🙂
Posted by IsobelandCat on March 28, 2012 at 20:31
Ooooh! Dramatic stuff. Like it.
Posted by Judee on March 29, 2012 at 09:24
Thank you, I like to get dramatic from time to time. Thanks for commenting.
Posted by irenelefort on March 28, 2012 at 16:42
Oooh! A triller! I like it and clever use of the prompt. 🙂
Here is the link to my piece:
Cheers!
Posted by Judee on March 28, 2012 at 17:06
Thank you irine. I enjoyed yours, too, it was definitely different and interesting.
Posted by Lisa Wields Words on March 28, 2012 at 14:01
Oh, this is exciting. I love your take on the prompt.
Posted by Judee on March 28, 2012 at 15:23
Thank you Lisa. 🙂
Posted by cobbies69 on March 28, 2012 at 11:56
Very good,like the line, carry on with the story…;)
Posted by Judee on March 28, 2012 at 12:25
Thank you. 🙂