100 Word Challenge: Rabbit

For this week’s 100 Word Challenge for Grownups, Julia has offered up a challenge with a twist.  We’ve been given an 8 word prompt, nothing unusual so far, and so we have 100 words, plus the 8 from the prompt, to create our entry.  What is different this time is that Julia has decreed, “You have 100 words making a total of 108. However, the last 10 words are going to be used to start a piece by someone else next week!!” Go check it out for yourself, just click the link or the logo.

This week’s prompt:

‘What was the rabbit late for?’ wondered Alice.

Rabbit Hunt  (107 words)

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‘What was the rabbit late for?’ wondered Alice, peering around the park.

Static in her ear, then, ” Fox-two to Foxy-Lady, do you copy?”

“Copy, Fox-two,”

“The rabbit has run.”

“What?”

“The rabbit–”

“I heard the first time! Where?”

“Out the south gate, must have sensed the trap.”

Weariness washed through Alice as she slumped onto the park bench. It had been a good plan. Her plan. It should have worked, dammit! What had gone wrong?

Now they had to go to plan-B, a much more dangerous option. Alice hated to take the risk, but she had no choice. The little girl’s life was in her hands.

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31 responses to this post.

  1. I love the take on the prompt, Judee. A really suspenseful piece!

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    • Thank you so much Ian. I wish I could have participated this week, but it wasn’t to be. Off to see if you participated.

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  2. Oooo! This has spy thriller all over it. I love it & you have really taken the prompt in a different direction. Great writing and use of the imagination. Thanks for joining in!

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  3. […] Place, Julia gave us an interesting twist to this weeks 100 word challenge, my entry is  100WCGU: Rabbit.  My second try at Quill Shiv’s Flash Fiction Faction gave me quite a creepy idea in Fiction […]

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  4. Don’t think I like the sound of Plan B, Alice obviously doesn’t either. Interesting final 10 words for next week.

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  5. Loved this. The idea of taking the story away from the traditional is a delightful concept.

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    • Thank you so much Sarah – did you participate too? I may have read it, but don’t have a link back to a blog for you, just twitter.

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      • Hmmm. I shall have to start leaving my blog in my comments I think. I’ve got around the blogger/wordpress commenting difficulty by using twitter to comment from.

        (But you found it anyway, because you are a detective! Thankyou for your comment, glad I made you laugh!)

  6. I like the sense of mystery at the end.

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  7. Oh scarey Judee, will you continue it? Is there a rabbit hole involved? You have left it very well for whatever Julia has planned for next week :-)and you have well and truly ran with it. Fabby!

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    • Thank you so much GG, and I can’t wait to see how Julia is going to figure out who works with what prompt! Lovely to see you here.

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  8. Nice take on the running rabbit! 😀 I never would have thought of that, myself, but it does make perfect sense. The tension with that one line – “I heard the first time! Where?” – gives me chills. 🙂 Great closing line, too: I’ll look forward to whomever gets to pick it up!

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  9. Thrillers are my favourite genre of book .. and this got me hooked from the outset.

    You’re very talented, I just wish there was more to read hehehe

    Andrea

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  10. Judee, this is terrific. When you are done with the novel, I want to read it! 😎

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  11. Great piece- reminded me of the Jackal or Bourne. Well written.

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  12. Ooooh! Dramatic stuff. Like it.

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  13. Oooh! A triller! I like it and clever use of the prompt. 🙂
    Here is the link to my piece:
    http://366degree.wordpress.com/2012/03/28/an-invitation-to-tea/
    Cheers!

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  14. Oh, this is exciting. I love your take on the prompt.

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  15. Very good,like the line, carry on with the story…;)

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