It’s Flash Friday, time for the Friday Fictioneers challenge, at Madison Woods blog. It’s short fiction of 100 words, created in your imagination with the aid of a picture prompt (or not). If you want to join in sometime, here is the link to Madison Woods Friday Fictioneers instruction page. To see hers and the other entries, go HERE to this weeks entries.
The picture prompt:
My entry, 99 words :
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Your soul shines forth as you stand in the doorway, intense flares of illumination reaching into this dimly lit room, like the last bright gasp of the sun before it sinks behind the horizon.
Is it time? The brightness in your eyes tells me it is so. The radiance spilling from you comforts me, assures me there is nothing to fear. A sweet smile of parting touches your lips, and you nod to me, as if to say, “all is well.” The door closes, leaving me alone; knowing, and at peace.
I wake, and wait for the phone call.
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Thank you for reading.
write tuit 
Posted by The Lime on February 7, 2012 at 15:02
Mm. That was an intense one. I especially like the last line. Thanks for sharing — sorry it took me so long to get here!
Posted by Judee on February 7, 2012 at 15:48
Never too late, thanks for commenting.
Posted by Quill Shiv on February 6, 2012 at 11:59
My mom has had dreams like this. Excellent work!
The links to my drabbles are here:
http://quillshiv.wordpress.com/2012/02/03/within-the-inglenook/
http://quillshiv.wordpress.com/2012/02/05/ellipsis/
Posted by Judee on February 6, 2012 at 17:03
Yes, they can be very powerful. Thanks for stopping by.
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Posted by LupusAnthropos on February 4, 2012 at 20:46
Very nice. If the metaphor is extended to include the fall AND rise of the sun, then this scenario could reflect something that is experienced and felt every day.
Here’s my story: http://wp.me/p24aJS-2l
Posted by Judee on February 7, 2012 at 15:49
Thanks for the visit and the comment!
Posted by writingbothsides on February 4, 2012 at 04:02
I really enjoyed this. Very subtle and poignant. Great last line.
Here’s mine: http://wp.me/p1Tjpv-8P
Posted by Judee on February 4, 2012 at 10:35
Thank you for the comment, subtle and poignant is what I was going for. Glad you liked it.
Posted by Madison Woods on February 4, 2012 at 03:39
My internet keeps going out while I’m waiting for the comment to post 😦 Now I can’t remember what I said originally, but I really enjoyed your story.
Posted by Judee on February 4, 2012 at 10:34
Sorry about the connection problems, that’s a real pain, I know. But thank you for dropping by, and I’m glad you enjoyed it.
Posted by Jake Kale on February 4, 2012 at 01:00
I love the build-up here, and the subtlety of that last line. The text is ambiguous, but the context is hauntingly clear. Very impressive.
Here’s my entry:
http://jaykayel.wordpress.com/2012/02/03/circular-logic-100-word-flash-fiction/
Posted by Judee on February 4, 2012 at 10:29
Thank you Jake, I was afraid that last line would either be too obvious, or misconstrued. I’m glad you enjoyed it.
Posted by Cara Michaels on February 3, 2012 at 23:30
Oh, I loved the ending. Bittersweet, yet peaceful. I imagined any number of folks who’d want that one moment to say goodbye. Very nice, Judee.
Posted by Judee on February 4, 2012 at 10:26
Thank you Cara, for your thoughtful comment. And yes, it is a lovely way to say goodbye.
Posted by Carlos Repuesto de la Tabla on February 3, 2012 at 21:57
That’s very dreamy, soft and intimate… a unique take on the photo! Lovely.
Posted by Judee on February 4, 2012 at 10:24
I’m glad you liked it, that is the feeling I was trying for. Thanks for the visit.
Posted by Wakefield Mahon on February 3, 2012 at 21:16
Wow you raised my goose pimples. What an evocative spiritual journey. Great job!
Posted by Judee on February 4, 2012 at 10:23
Thank you so much Wakefield, so glad you dropped by.
Posted by eliserae on February 3, 2012 at 20:12
The phone call comes from the hospital and says “No, no everything’s fine. Come on down, she just woke up.”
This actually a really peaceful way of moving on.
It’s a happy/sad ending.
Here’s mine: http://wp.me/p29sL6-E
Posted by Judee on February 4, 2012 at 10:22
Ah, the optimist! Wouldn’t that be nice? But yes, this way was very peaceful. Thank you for commenting.
Posted by Siobhan Muir on February 3, 2012 at 19:56
Wow, powerful writing, Judee. I loved the use of the photo as a premonition and the sense of sadness pervades all the words. Well done. 🙂
Posted by Judee on February 4, 2012 at 10:19
Thank you so much Siohban. I’m glad you liked it.
Posted by bridgesareforburning on February 3, 2012 at 16:42
Very creative take on the photo. The images are just suggestive enough to keep the story moving ahead. I think the ending is mysterious, but I think it means the dream was an omen of passage, and our hero is waiting to get the news. Great story!
Here’s mine: http://bridgesareforburning.wordpress.com/
Posted by Judee on February 4, 2012 at 10:16
Thank you for the thoughtful comment. And yes, you caught the intention. That’s good to know, because sometimes in writing something that may seem obvious to the writer, it may not be so to the reader.
Posted by loustar02 on February 3, 2012 at 15:53
I wasn’t really sure what was going on in the first paragraph but then the beauty of the next paragraph and the killer end line made me think that the “soul shiner” is dead and the other is waiting for the call to confirm it? If so, this is nicely done.
Posted by Judee on February 4, 2012 at 10:00
Yes, you got it. i wasn’t sure how clear it would be, so I’m glad you picked up on that. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Posted by kbnelson on February 3, 2012 at 15:32
Neat ending! Full of possibility (or could it be disaster?)
Thanks for sharing!
http://kbnelson.wordpress.com/2012/02/03/friday-flash-the-burn/
Posted by Judee on February 4, 2012 at 10:01
I think short fiction like this is very open to interpretation – which is what makes it so fun! Thansk for the visit.